"How you know he died, he tell you?"
Try to leave out the part that readers tend to skip. Think of what you skip reading a novel: thick paragraphs of prose you can see have too many words in them. My most important rule is one that sums up the 10: if it sounds like writing, I rewrite it.
He was a master of dialogue, wit, and concision with a touch of style. I'll miss him. Rest in Peace.